This is just my opinion, hope it helps:
I would say that you need to make your concise analysis of the data come more to the forefront in each section. The point would be that the person you’re giving this to doesn’t have that much time to go into the numbers.
When you present a clear idea first, if your client is interested they can further confirm it by looking into the numbers.
Furthermore, I would try to edit the text to be more concise and a little less technical: an example:
* 53.03% conversion rate for users who received 3 pairs to try on at home.
* 79.25% conversion rate for users who received 5 pairs to try on at home.
can be something like
Conversion rate Try-at-home users with 3 pairs: 50% vs 5 pairs: 80%
Obviously the editing options on this comment section are limited but notice how I’m trying to use formatting to guide my client to the ideas I want him/her to see. My idea is always to make it as easy as possible for the client to read the most important ideas (rather than information).
In general, I find less is more with these things in terms of text.